"She stood and looked", or "she is standing and is looking". Not "she stood and is looking". Maybe she looked as if she was standing.
I'm just sat sitting here, not stood standing. I can't stand sitting too long.
Has anyone reading this thread read the part about the airship in my first novel please?
I have read the part linked to. It reads like a film-script, not a novel.
Thank you for reading it and for the feedback.
William
]]>Do you know of any novel written as a ready-made film script?
No.
William
]]>Has anyone reading this thread read the part about the airship in my first novel please?
I have read the part linked to. It reads like a film-script, not a novel.
]]>I can try to do both, as they are not mutually exclusive.
But unfortunately they are. Just concentrate on writing a good, readable novel. If anyone wants to make a film from it, you (or the film maker) can write a film script based on the novel. A film script can never read like a novel.
Do you know of any novel written as a ready-made film script?
]]>Has anyone reading this thread read the part about the airship in my first novel please?
http://www.users.globalnet.co.uk/~ngo/l … er_017.pdf
William
Anybody?
The thread has stuck at 212 views, so let's move it forward please.
William
]]>http://www.users.globalnet.co.uk/~ngo/l … er_017.pdf
William
]]>Alas, yet thank you for replying.
The part in Chapter 17 of my first novel that was influenced by what you had posted in the Serif lounge forum is the part about the airship.
You had posted about an airship and that was therefore a topic that I had in my mind at the time, so I wrote about an airship and that developed into something for the story. I like to think that the part inspired by the airship is amongst the best pieces of my writing.
William
]]>Has Geoff or anyone else followed the links in my previous post and had a read please?
I haven't, sorry. As explained earlier, I find your style too cumbersome to be read enjoyably.
Geoff
]]>William
]]>By the way, the way that the forum has displayed the sequence of three links can give the impression that I have put the same link twice by mistake, yet that is not the case, there are three documents.
If you type or paste a URL on its own, it will be displayed in full if short enough or with an ellipsis in place of a string of characters near the end if it’s too long. However, you can provide your own display text if you wish to determine how the link will appear in your posted message; for example, instead of typing
http://www.users.globalnet.co.uk/~ngo/localizable_sentences_the_novel_author_note_after_chapter_081.pdfor
[url]http://www.users.globalnet.co.uk/~ngo/localizable_sentences_the_novel_author_note_after_chapter_081.pdf[/url]you can type
[url=http://www.users.globalnet.co.uk/~ngo/localizable_sentences_the_novel_author_note_after_chapter_081.pdf]Author note after chapter 81[/url]The latter will look like this when previewed or posted:
]]>Either the ending of the first novel or the start of the first novel, or maybe dipped-in to a chapter inthe middle?
If dipping-in, I like to think that Chapter 34 is one of the best chapters in the novel.
By the way, the way that the forum has displayed the sequence of three links can give the impression that I have put the same link twice by mistake, yet that is not the case, there are three documents.
By the way Geoff, one chapter of the first novel includes something inspired by a post that you made in the Serif lounge forum.
http://www.users.globalnet.co.uk/~ngo/l … er_017.pdf
Here is an author note written before Chapter 17 was written.
http://www.users.globalnet.co.uk/~ngo/l … er_013.pdf
I am glad that I included some author notes and dated them. The novel was written from June 2016 to February 2019, so the author note mentioned was quite early in the writing process.
Please know that each chapter of the novel has the date of its publication built-in to its document properties, which can be accessed from Adobe Reader.
William
]]>"She stood and looked", or "she is standing and is looking". Not "she stood and is looking". Maybe she looked as if she was standing.
I'm just sat sitting here, not stood standing. I can't stand sitting too long.
I'm just sat sitting here, not stood standing. I can't stand sitting too long.
]]>William is imagining Angela in the present, not the past.
The phrase “I can imagine Angela standing there” doesn’t tell me anything about whether it’s past, present, or future!
]]>Better now?
Better grammatically perhaps, but that somewhat changes the meaning. William is imagining Angela in the present, not the past.
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